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Memories 2/?, PG-13, Nathan, OC

  • May. 13th, 2009 at 8:03 AM
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Title: Memories 2/?

Author: Godiloveslash

Fandoms: Heroes/Dollhouse with a touch of Profit later on

Pairings: Nathan/OC, Nathan/Peter implied, Nathan/Paul, Alpha/Echo, Nathan/Echo, Alpha/Nathan

Warnings: Spoilers for both shows, in particular, spoilers for the season three finale of Heroes, non con implied, violence mentioned

Rating: PG-13 for now but it may rise

Disclaimer: No one from either show belongs to me darn it, if they did Dollhouse would run forever and Bryan Fuller would have full control over Heroes. Kyle is also not mine; my lovely Kris who has allowed me to play in her sand box, created him

Summary: What if Angela had made a different choice that day in the hotel

Author’s Note: I am not really happy with the ending of this chapter really, but it's the way it flowed so I went with it. Please leave feedback I really want to know what you guys think.

One year ago



“I can assure you we will handle him with the utmost secrecy if you allow us to create such an imprint,” Adeline Dewitt told her guest as she poured tea. The woman on the other side of the table frowned as she accepted the offered cup. “Only our most valued clients will be able to request it and only then after a additional background check, references and increased fees,” Dewitt added trying to sell the woman on her idea.



Finally her guest spoke. “I hope you understand I am not doing this to increase your business or your popularity,” the woman said in an icy tone, “but to protect him at any cost, that is why I contacted you in the first place.” Dewitt nodded, her guest was paying and paying handsomely for the Dollhouse’s services and Adeline would do everything in her power to accommodate her, while at the same time serving her superiors.



“It is so rare we receive older dolls,” Dewitt said in a soft tone meant to calm her guest’s ire and thank her at the same time, “with this imprint he would more then pay for his keep and ease your stress at the same time.” The woman considered this or pretended to anyway, Dewitt never noticed an odd gleam of pleasure spark in her eyes.



The woman sighed. “Very well, but in return I have a request to make of you, three in fact,” Dewitt nodded calmly as the woman pulled a picture out of her purse and pushed it across the table. “I want him to have a handler, who looks as close to this man as possible. I will explain why when and if the doll arrives here. Second, he is to be wiped clean as deep as you can go. I want him to have no memory of his former life and no possibility of gaining it back again.”



Dewitt nodded both requests could be handled well enough, however odd the first one seemed. “And the third request,” she asked calmly causing her guest to smile for the first time since entering the office. “Keep him away from my son,” said the woman taking a sip of her tea.



Adeline smiled again. “Your wish is our command Mrs. Petrelli.”



************

Present Day



Boyd yawned for what seemed like the fiftieth time and Kyle fought the urge to kill him. Instead the young man turned his attention to the monitors to double-check his doll’s progress.



Both Echo and Nylar were operating within parameters tonight even with the tweaks to the imprint Topher had done earlier. In fact, the crowd around Nylar was so dense, Kyle was starting to wonder if the older man could even breath much less talk to everyone who wanted a piece of his time.



“Would you look at that,” Boyd remarked pointing at the monitors, “all he has to do is smile and half the women throw their room keys at him. Kyle chuckled. “Imprint or not the man has natural charm, something I can’t say for the real Senator.”



Both men laughed and Boyd shook his head. “That guy goes through more emotional flip flops then any other celebrity in Hollywood,” Kyle answered glancing at the clock. “That’s a politician for you,” said Boyd giving Kyle a look, “time to bring them in?”



Kyle nodded and gave his doll the key word that would bring him back to the van as Boyd did the same for Echo. The handlers watched the chatting couple calmly a moment when Kyle spotted someone following them. He wouldn’t have though anything of it if the guy hadn’t been Kyle’s carbon copy down to the bangs that were starting to fall in his face.



He watched in shock as the man tapped Nylar on the shoulder and started talking to him. The senator imprint was designed to have all of Petrelli’s good qualities and a basic knowledge of real man’s background but that was it. If the guy wasn’t fooled then they might have a situation on their hands.



Nylar talked to the man a few minutes and seemed to appease him with a gentle touch to the shoulder. He and Echo then returned to the van much more subdued then they were a moment ago.



“Everything all right Senator and Mrs. Petrelli,” Kyle asked trying to sound less worried about his charge then he really was. “Yes everything is fine,” Nylar replied in that tone of voice that normally sent shivers down Kyle’s spine. “My brother just decided to make an unscheduled visit to LA is all.”



Boyd and Kyle looked at each other in stunned silence. “Oh shit,” Kyle muttered, “Dewitt is not going to like this."

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[info]ibonekoen wrote:
May. 13th, 2009 02:15 pm (UTC)
Leave it to Peter to throw a monkey wrench into the works. XD Can't wait to see what happens next! :D
[info]whisper2ascream wrote:
May. 15th, 2009 04:13 am (UTC)
Oh Peter... *loves*

This is really interesting though I've only seen the first two eps of Dollhouse so far. And the ending of this chapter made sense to me.
[info]godiloveslash wrote:
May. 15th, 2009 01:41 pm (UTC)
heee yes naughty Peter, you will find out what he's doing in LA a few chapters from now when we see the same scene from his point of view.

I am so happy that the ending seems to be working.
[info]jaune_chat wrote:
May. 17th, 2009 11:56 am (UTC)
Hmm... I kind of like where this is going, but in many ways I am intensely confusilated. So Nylar is doing all of Sylar!Nathan's public appearances? But wouldn't that, by definition, put him right back into the line of fire? Public functions are perhaps the most dangerous for famous figures, as there are so many ways for people to get at them. This would seem to be the opposite of being able to keep Nylar safe.

It's much more difficult to control traffic flow in a public venue, as seen by the fact that Kyle and Boyd weren't able to detect Peter until he got to Nylar. If Peter had been an assassin, say, Nylar could be messily dead.

Also, if Ma Petrelli doesn't want Peter to talk to Nylar, having Nylar right out in public essentially as Nathan would be like putting a target on his back for his brother to find him. Very hard to keep them separated if Peter only has to turn on the TV to find where he might be.

Thirdly, if Angela didn't want Nylar to have any contact with Peter, requesting a handler that looks just like him would seem to be intensely counterproductive. I mean, a nice emotional gesture, but head-scratchingly counterproductive.

As a reader, I feel I'm getting more mystery and less answers, to the point of frustration. I know Dollhouse cultivates mystery, but dropping a few solid answers here and there would help me feel a little more connected and invested in the story.

Another point, you should be able to answer your questions in-story; you should never need author's notes to explain crucial plot points (like in the first part with Nylar being healed by Claire's blood) unless you're establishing an AU or explaining a prompt.

I mean this only as constructive criticism; I like your concept, truly I do! I only want to help your story, and I hope you continue! Best of luck. :-)
[info]godiloveslash wrote:
May. 17th, 2009 08:22 pm (UTC)
There will be answers I promise you that and I am very, very thankful for the nitpicky type feedback. Really I am it makes me a much better writer and makes future chapters better as well.

I had a different ending for this chapter in mind when I wrote it which is why I am not happy with this one, but the original chapter wouldn't have worked either for the reasons you cited. Dewitt is in my mind very cocky which is why she's going against what Angela originally wanted, however this will come back and bite her later in terms of Nylar's memories, Paul and Alpha.

Unlike the Heroes writers I try to have payoff when I set something up! Thank you so much for the feedback thought, you are one of my favorite writers and it means the world to me that you are taking the time out to tell me what needs to be fixed.

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